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Enyo
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Hey Everyone,

 

I've decided to write my first fanfiction ever and its a Conqueror story. :D  Truthfully, I've been working on another fiction story of mine and this Conqueror concept is distracting me so I'm getting it out of my skull.  Anyway, I'm just looking for some feed back on this.  You know; is it good, is it bad, should I get a beta and post it somewhere when its finished?  Should I test out other chapters on you guys?  That sort of stuff.  So, yeah, here are the first two chapters.  Kudos to anyone who writes comments, and do be gentle it is a rough draft after all.

 

--Enyo

 

The Death of Me: A Conqueror Tale

 

Chapter 1

 

The dream was always the same. She would be lying on a soft bed roll under the stars, arguing with the person lying beside her about the pattern of a constellation. She was so sure that the stars formed a bear while her companion was adamant that they formed a dipper. As they fell into a comfortable silence Gabrielle would feel a hand slip into hers and her companion would whisper, “I love you Gabrielle.”

 

Gabrielle would smile and turn her head to look at her companion only to find herself looking into the cold, blue orbs of the Conqueror. The hand holding Gabrielle’s would suddenly grip it with inhuman strength keeping her from rolling away from the dangerous woman. The Conqueror would give her a feral grin before snarling, “Break her legs!”

 

Gabrielle awoke from the nightmare with a scream, gripping her right leg as it throbbed. The guards outside her hut had long ago stopped rushing in when they heard the Amazon Queen’s cries of pain this early in the morning knowing that Gabrielle’s legs were at their worst in the early hours. Throwing her legs over the side of the cot the young Queen began to massage her aching right leg which had received the brunt of the force used to break her legs. It had been over two years since she had been condemned by The Conqueror of Greece, the Destroyer of Nations, the Lion of Amphipolis, Xena. She could still see the look in the Conqueror’s eyes as her cross was dragged away from the agora to main road to be planted as a warning to others who would dared speak out. Those eyes filled with nothing but amusement at Gabrielle’s pain.

 

It was only by the grace of Artemis that Ephiny and Eponin found her in time; returning the broken body of their Queen to Amazon lands. For the next five months Gabrielle was confined to the healers hut as her legs healed and she relearned how to walk. The healer’s had been able to set the breaks but the right leg was damaged to the extent that the young woman would always walk with a slight limp. During those five months of Tartaros Gabrielle could only think of one thing, as she was tormented by her pain and the visions of her sentencing, revenge. After her legs were relatively healed she left the Amazons and traveled for over a year and half, learning all she could about fighting and healing. She was a quick student and soon became a master with the staff as well as the sais, and had even learned how to use pressure points so that she could walk and run normally for a short time. By the time she returned to Amazon lands most of her Amazons didn’t even recognize her. She rode in on a dark brown mare dressed in black warlord leathers, her body toned from working hard with her staff and sais, and her golden hair cut short. The young idealistic bard was gone, now all that was left was a determined warrior.

 

Once she had massaged enough of the pain away Gabrielle stood and limped over to her leathers which lay on her desk. Gone were the scrolls and decorations which had once littered the Queen’s hut now it was more Spartan in appearance. There was only a cot, a desk, chair, and a small table to hold her ceremonial mask and jewelry. Dawning her leathers the young Queen sheathed her sais and picked up the mask as well as the packed leather bag lying beneath the desk before exiting the hut. Outside, she dismissed the guards before heading over to her regent’s hut. She barely acknowledged the Amazons who nodded to her too focused on the argument she would be presenting to Ephiny. As she approached Ephiny’s hut she nodded to the guards before knocking.

 

“Enter.”

 

Gabrielle pushed the door to the hut open, softly closing it behind her as she took in the Regent’s home. Ephiny’s hut was much like her own, containing the same furniture but she had allowed for a few small Amazon paintings as well as a shelf for scrolls many of which were copies of Gabrielle’s stories. The curly-haired warrior sat behind her desk and had been apparently going over the weapons inventory before Gabrielle had interrupted.

 

Ephiny stood, “My Queen.”

 

Gabrielle’s face softened as she took in the sight of her former lover, after her near death experience on the cross they had slowly grown apart. Mostly due to the young queen’s bitterness, the loss of that relationship was something she regretted.

 

“Ephiny, please don’t call me that. At least not when we’re alone,” said Gabrielle waving for the regent to take her seat.

 

Ephiny sat, “As you wish, Gabrielle.”

 

For a moment there was only silence as the two Amazons stared at each other. Ephiny took in the leathers, the sheathed sais in Gabrielle’s boots, and the packed bag; but she noticeably stiffened when her eyes found the mask.

 

“You’re going through with it,” she whispered.

 

Gabrielle merely nodded.

 

The regent stood up quickly, knocking over her chair, and began to pace behind the desk. She soon came to a stop slamming her fist into the desk, “You can’t do this!”

 

Gabrielle raised her chin and gave Ephiny her best regal look, “I’m Queen, Ephiny, and it’s my decision to make. Not yours.”

 

The regent rounded the desk and grasped the young Queen by the shoulders, “Let someone else go. Let me go. You don’t need to do this.”

 

Gabrielle pulled away from Ephiny and limped over to the cot; setting her things down she sat and looked up at her friend. “You know I have to do this Eph, Melosa always told me that the best leaders never order their warriors to do something they are not willing to do themselves.”

 

Ephiny kneeled before her friend taking the Queen’s hands in her own, “Gabrielle, you have never killed anyone before. And killing someone in cold blood, up close is even hard for the most seasoned warriors. You’ll see the light leave your victim’s eyes could you handle that Gabrielle?”

 

The short blonde glanced down at their joined hands before allowing her sea-green eyes to meet Ephiny’s, “My sister was kidnapped by her slavers, my village starved and then was destroyed because of her laws, my parents lost everything, and she…” Gabrielle glanced away unshed tears filled her eyes at the unpleasant memories.

 

Ephiny squeezed her hands, “And she broke your legs. I’m not saying she doesn’t deserve what’s coming to her. It’s just that she has taken so much from you already, I don’t want her to take your blood innocence as well.”

 

Gabrielle returned her gaze to her friends, her eyes hardened with hate, “No, she won’t take it Ephiny, I will gladly give it to her. I will be the one to end that monster. I will assassinate the Conqueror of Greece, I will kill Xena.”

 

Ephiny tried another route, “What about us, Gabrielle? The Amazons need their Queen and we barely have a stable agreement with the Conqueror as it is. If she should find out that you are the Queen she will declare war.”

 

Ephiny knew that was the wrong argument to use when Gabrielle wrenched her hands out of the Regent’s with a look of disgust on her face. Standing the Queen looked down at the warrior at her feet, “Do you think I’m stupid or careless enough to do that Ephiny? I would never endanger our sisters like that. All of my tools and supplies are free of all Amazon markings.”

 

Ephiny stood, “What about your shoulder?”

 

Gabrielle glanced at her right shoulder which bore the mark of Amazon royalty. Queen Melosa had given her personally once Gabrielle had set up an alliance between the Amazons and the Centaurs without bloodshed.

 

“The clothes I will be wearing into the palace will cover it. If for some reason I fail and I’m captured I’ll remove it by any means necessary before she sees it.”

 

The Regent cringed at the idea of what the short blonde may have to do to remove the mark in a dark cell in the Conqueror’s dungeon. Leaning down Gabrielle picked up her mask, gently the young Queen took Ephiny’s hand giving her the mask, “I want you to have my rite of caste, Ephiny.”

 

Ephiny began to refuse but Gabrielle reached up and cupped her face shushing her, “If I don’t come back Eph our sisters will need someone to lead them. You’re the only person I can trust to keep our sisters safe and to not come for me if I’m captured.”

 

“Gabrielle.”

 

“I love you, Ephiny and I’m sorry that I let what we had die. Please, Eph, accept my apology and my right of caste.”

 

The Regent’s vision blurred with tears but she nodded her agreement.

 

The young Queen smiled, which to Ephiny was a gift in and of itself, then slung her bag over her shoulder before heading for the door.

 

“Gabrielle, wait.”

 

Turning around Gabrielle found Ephiny holding out a small bottle to her, tears running down her face, “Take this with you. If you get into trouble and there looks like there’s no way out just flip the top open and drink. It’ll work fast, you shouldn’t feel a thing, it even tastes sweet from what the healers tell me.”

 

Gabrielle took the vial of poison solemnly and slipped it between her breasts for safe keeping. Before she knew what was happening she felt Ephiny’s warm lips on hers gracing her with a soft kiss.

 

“I love you too Gabrielle. Please come back safe,” She whispered.

 

For once Gabrielle had no words, so she merely nodded then turned and left the hut beginning the journey that would lead her on a crash course with destiny.

 

 

 

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

July 25, 2010 at 11:59 PM Flag Quote & Reply

Enyo
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Here's the second chapter.

 

--E

 

Chapter 2

 

 

It had taken Gabrielle seven days to reach Corinth, just in time for the Conqueror’s birthday exactly as she had planned. The city was bustling about with everyone preparing for the night’s festivities. From what Gabrielle heard from the merchants in the market, dignitaries from Rome, Egypt, Britannia, Chin, and more had arrived to celebrate the Conqueror’s special day. Gabrielle was slightly sickened at the idea of everyone being excited by the monster’s birthday. At least the dignitaries had excuses; after all, Xena had already conquered their lands they were only around because she required their services. But none of them were delusional enough to think they were irreplaceable, there was always someone else.

 

 

Gabrielle headed for the palace as darkness began to creep into the sky, passing through the gates easily. The guards were too busy with all of the wagons filled with last minute food, drink, and gifts that they barely noticed a single, cloaked rider on horseback. Drawing her dark cloak a little tighter around her, Gabrielle allowed a stable boy to take her horse after she removed her bag. Noticing some of the servants unloading a wagon filled with food she quickly applied the pressure points to her leg and ran over. Picking up a box filled with onions she followed the servants into the kitchens. The kitchens looked like a war zone, cooks and assistants ran back and forth between pots and pans. Cutting up vegetables and meat, stirring the stew, turning the roast boar on the spit, kneading bread, everyone in the very hot room was doing something and was paying little attention to their surroundings, which was perfect for Gabrielle. Setting the onions down Gabrielle found the nearest stairs heading up and ran up them. As she reached the top of the stairs she found herself in a small hallway with only a two doors; she could here laughter and talking coming from one door and suspected it was the banquet hall. Choosing the other door she walked into the large entry hall of the palace. Seeing the grand, marble staircase right in front of the main entry way she made a run for it taking the stairs two at a time. She wondered for a moment where all of the guards were but suspected that most of them were probably celebrating in the barracks or outside on sentry duty. She didn’t think about it too hard not wanting to question a gift from the Gods.

 

 

After traveling up level upon level and getting lost a few times Gabrielle found herself outside what she suspected were the Conqueror’s bed chambers judging by the single guard in front of the doors. She had stopped only once before to change out of her leathers and cloak into black, trousers, tunic, gloves, and mask which covered everything but her eyes. She had hidden her bag and leathers in a bedroom on the third floor which looked like it hadn’t been lived in for some time. For a moment she pondered letting the guard see her when she made the attack so that she could have a little bit of a fight to warm her muscles up but rejected the idea. There was no need to draw attention at this time. So she quickly and quietly disabled the guard; throwing a dinar to distract him before dashing out and slamming the hilt of her sai against the back of his skull twice. With some effort she dragged the guard’s limp body over to a small door down the hall from the Conqueror’s bedroom. Opening it she found a linen closet, tossing the body in. Closing the door she headed back down the hall to the bedroom, gently she turned the handle and entered.

 

 

The lush surroundings of the Conqueror’s bedroom were easily illuminated by the light from the setting sun coming through the floor to ceiling windows, which opened out onto a balcony. The gigantic room contained a sitting area with couches, chairs, and large pillows surrounding a fire place, a beautifully carved oak desk and winged back chair stood in one corner, a large cabinet stood against the opposite wall and then there was the huge four poster bed which dominated the room. Gabrielle didn’t miss the chains attached to the head and foot boards or the chains which hung from one wall but she chose to ignore them. It didn’t surprise her that the Conqueror probably enjoyed dominating her bedmates. Off to the right were two more doors; Gabrielle suspected that one led to a servant’s quarters and the other to a closet.

 

 

Sensing no other presence in the room Gabrielle entered and closed the door behind her. Undoing the pressure points on her leg she limped over to the desk, figuring that she may as well read something while she waited for her target to arrive. Picking up one of the scrolls she found it was an account of a crime that had been committed by a young man only seventeen seasons of age. Apparently, he had spoken out against the Conqueror for closing down the Academy for Bards in Athens. Gabrielle read the report and felt her gut tighten, this boy who had committed the same crime as her two years ago would undoubtedly be put on the cross, but as she reached the end of the report something caught her eye. Scribbled at the bottom in handwriting that was obviously not the person’s who had written the report were the words:

 

 

Three months as an indentured servant.

 

 

Gabrielle re-read the words, what was this? Was one of the Conqueror’s advisors suggesting less lethal punishments to the ruler of the known world? If that was true then the advisor, whoever they were, had guts. She scanned the other scrolls and found similar notes written at the bottom. Then she came across a half written proclamation in the same hand and it came to her, the notes were written by the Conqueror. But why would she decide to be so lenient with her prisoners? What had caused the change?

 

 

“Who are you?” growled a voice that could only belong to one person. The one person who had haunted Gabrielle’s dreams for the past two years.

 

The short blonde didn’t even think about her next movements she just acted. In a flash she had replaced the pressure points on her leg, dashed over the bed and headed out onto the balcony. Her plan to take the Conqueror unawares while bedding one of her guests had gone out the window (so to speak) and now she needed space to work if she was going to overpower this woman. The Conqueror didn’t even bother calling the guards; she drew the ceremonial sword at her waist and followed. Gabrielle turned drawing her sais getting into a defensive stance to take on the Conqueror. The dark-haired fury flew at her in a blur of blue and gold as she attacked. Raising her sais Gabrielle caught the down ward strike of the blade and turned it away. Lunging forward she made to stab the Conqueror in the neck but the move was parried by the sword, locking the two weapons together. However, the move had brought the two warriors closer together allowing Gabrielle her first real look at her target.

 

 

The Conqueror was dressed in blue trousers, tunic, and robe all lined in gold; which brought out the dark-haired warrior’s eyes. Xena’s long dark locks flowed down her shoulders, her red lips were set in a thin line of concentration, but her eyes were filled with the dark hunger to defeat the opponent before her. The look only made Gabrielle re-double her efforts to win; pushing back harder forcing the sword back toward the Conqueror. All of a sudden Xena broke the stalemate and gave a fierce battle cry before doing a back flip over her assailant’s head. It was exactly what Gabrielle had been waiting for; the Conqueror’s move was designed to either cause her opponent to hesitate from the awe they felt at such a move or to move fast enough to attack her opponent from behind. Or both. Gabrielle had seen moves like this before in her travels and wasn’t impressed; in fact, she knew just where to strike when Xena landed. Turning she raised the sai in her left hand she trapped the blade of the Conqueror’s weapon in the hilt of the sai, forcing it away from her; while she brought the other up to the monster’s heart. Preparing to plunge the blade into the Conqueror’s dark heart Gabrielle glanced away from Xena’s breast looking up into her eyes. And in that moment when sapphire met emerald something passed between them; something that Gabrielle had felt only once before when the Conqueror touched her before she was crucified. At the time she thought it was anger now she wasn’t so sure. Unfortunately, her hesitation had cost her and before she knew it her legs were kicked out from under her. The wind rushed out of her as she hit the stone floor of the balcony; her vision was filled with a view of the first stars of the evening reminding her of the dream that Morpheus had tortured her with for the past two years. She barely had time to think about the nightmare before her view was filled with ice blue eyes glaring down at her. The Conqueror straddled Gabrielle’s waist, pinning her while she brought the blade of her sword to the assassin’s throat.

 

 

“Whatever you thought you were doing here, you’ve failed,” snarled the Conqueror.

 

 

Gabrielle said nothing; glaring up into those eyes she daring her tormenter to end it. The Conqueror tensed her arm preparing to deliver the lethal move but stopped. Instead the blade was pulled away from Gabrielle’s throat and she breathed a sigh of relief before a fist slamming into her head sent her into the swirling darkness of unconsciousness.

 

 

[End of Chapter 2]

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

July 26, 2010 at 12:01 AM Flag Quote & Reply

Rio
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Very nicely done. I like how you effortlessly added your own little touch to a scene we all know from the original show. It has a nice pace and a compelling take on these familiar characters. I look forward to reading more of this.


Rio

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      "Most of the important things in the world have been accomplished by people who have kept on trying when there seemed to be no hope at all." -- Dale Carnegie

July 26, 2010 at 9:40 AM Flag Quote & Reply

Sue
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Ok, I'm hooked!  I look forward to the next chapter.

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Learn to laugh at yourself...it takes the fun out of it for everyone else! 
July 26, 2010 at 1:28 PM Flag Quote & Reply

The Disciple
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I can't wait to read the next part!

July 26, 2010 at 2:12 PM Flag Quote & Reply

Enyo
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Thanks guys.  I'm glad you like it.  I have gotten some feed back that has made me aware of my grammatical errors in the story.  (smacks the back of my hand, bad writer!)  That's what happens when you go too fast and don't go back over your work.  Anyway, I'm working on a rewrite and the third chapter.  Thank you again.

 

 

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

July 26, 2010 at 8:03 PM Flag Quote & Reply

Enyo
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If anyone is interested.  Chapters 1-6 are now up on Fanfiction.net.

 

 

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6362195/1/The_Death_of_Me_A_Conquerors_Tale

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

September 30, 2010 at 7:10 AM Flag Quote & Reply

Rio
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Congratulations Enyo! I've added it to the Conqueror: Stand Alone Scrolls page. If you've got a story description, I could post that, too (hint, hint).

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      "Most of the important things in the world have been accomplished by people who have kept on trying when there seemed to be no hope at all." -- Dale Carnegie

September 30, 2010 at 11:13 AM Flag Quote & Reply

Sue
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Awesome...can't wait to read it! 

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Sue

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Learn to laugh at yourself...it takes the fun out of it for everyone else! 
September 30, 2010 at 12:45 PM Flag Quote & Reply

Enyo
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Thanks for the support guys.  I'm sending the story description to you now Rio.  And thanks Sue, I'm avidly reading your story as well.

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

October 1, 2010 at 3:01 AM Flag Quote & Reply

Enyo
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Hey guys,

Just so you know The Death of Me has finally been completed on fanfiction.net, so go give it a read and tell me what you think.  I will be posting the chapters to another Conqueror story sometime this week but it won't be a sequel to The Death of Me.

The new Conqueror story will be called Conquering Shadows and will begin two years after the events of FIN and Gabrielle making a deal with the Fates to change the world and bring back Xena.  This then creates a whole new world where Xena the Conqueror has taken over Chin, Japa, Persia, and pretty much everywhere else except Greece and by the way is a Maenad blessed by Dionysis (basically a bacchae who can walk in sunlight and kick your a$$).  And Gabrielle is the captain of the one ship in the Greek fleet which continues to defeat the Conqueror's ships.  Making the young bard a really nice target for Xena.

Have a great day guys.

 

 

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"Vincam Aut Moriar!"

 

 --Enyo

August 1, 2011 at 10:34 PM Flag Quote & Reply

Rio
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Thanks Enyo, Death of Me is moving to the top of my reading list. And Conquering Shadows sounds great, I can't wait to read it.

Rio

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      "Most of the important things in the world have been accomplished by people who have kept on trying when there seemed to be no hope at all." -- Dale Carnegie

August 2, 2011 at 10:48 AM Flag Quote & Reply

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